很多学生觉得英语写作是一件很头疼的事情,每次写作文就好像挤牙膏一样痛苦!归根结底,是学生不知道怎么样构思文章,升级短语和句子。其实,中考的写作并不难,我们需要做的,是学会遣词,造句和谋篇。今天我们就以2015年中考作文为例,运用写作的五步法,一起来看一下,我们如何写出一篇赏心悦目的中考作文。
2015年广州中考书面表达
注意:
1. 参考词汇:模型制作 model making
2. 词数80左右(文章开头已给出,不计入词数);
3. 不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息,否则不予评分。
students in our school are free to choose some special courses according to their interest.
相关词汇
强身健体:build up one’s body
鼓励合作:encourage cooperation
了解科学:learn about science/ get closer to the science
提高兴趣:improve your interests/ help you become more interested
英语戏团:english drama training
练习口语:
practice oral/ spoken english
学习表演:learn to act/ learn how to act
tips: 在翻译成句时,题目给的内容是非常有限的八个字,逐字翻译文章会没什么文采,有时候甚至字数不够。所以我们可以思考“为什么,怎么样”,来补充更多相关细节,让句子变得丰满。
举个例子:题目是“强身健体,鼓励合作”,这个时候我们就可以思考,为什么要强身健体?强身健体有什么好处?为什么要鼓励合作?鼓励合作有什么好处?
只要我们开动我们的小脑筋,大家都可以想出相关的理由。比如:
(1) 我们学校给学生提供了足球课程。踢足球可以让你强身健体。多做运动,有利于身体健康。
our school provides students with football training class. playing football can build up our body. doing more exercises will keep you healthy.
(2) 鼓励合作有利于培养团队精神。
encouraging cooperation can develop the teamwork spirits.
当然,不需要每个点都这样扩充,但是可以运用这样的思维进行写作,让文章变得更加高大上。
那么接下来,我们来继续翻译题目的要点。
(1) 模型制作,能给你提供一个机会,让你更好地了解科学,从而提高对它的兴趣。
model-making course can be one of your chances to get closer to the science and help you become more interested in it.
(2) 在这里,你可以参加英语戏团课程。在课程里面,你将会学到怎么样表演地更加生动和更加自信。另外,通过这个课程,你可以不断练习口语,从而提高流畅度。
there is
an english drama training course for you. in this course, you will be able to learn to act more vividly and confidently in public. besides, you can practice your oral english so that you can improve your fluency of speaking.
(3) 建议的课程:
读书课程会被很多学生所喜欢,因为读书可以开阔视野,增长见识。
reading course is also preferred by many students because it can enable you to widen your horizons and expand your knowledge.
说到这里,不得不提的是:英美人士说话是很注重逻辑的,这点也体现在他们的文章里面。作为中学生的我们,虽然对逻辑方面的要求不如雅思托福那么高,但是也需要让行文结构变得更加流畅。那么在初中,我们就可以在写作列点的时候应用到以下的链接词来。
first of all, ……
in addition, / besides,……
what’s more, / furthermore, ……
last but not least,……
另外,还有一些我们非常熟悉的,比如 and, but, because, then, also, therefore等词,可以让句子与句子直接更加流畅。
而纵观2012~2016年的中考写作,我们会发现,每一年都需要写到个人的观点。在写到这些内容的时候,我们就需要用到非常经典的“在我看来”的短语。这里给大家提供7个短语,供大家备考使用。
(1) in my opinion,
(2) in my view,
(3) as far as i’m
concerned,
(4) from my point of view,
(5) as for me,
(6) as to me,
(7) personally speaking,
现在我们一起来运用这些短语,把我们刚才的句子连接起来。
______ , our school provides students with football training class. playing football can build up our body _____ doing more exercises will keep you healthy.______,encouraging cooperation can develop the teamwork spirits. _____model-making course can be one of your chances to get closer to the science and help you become more interested in it. ___, there is an english drama training course for you. in this course, you will be able to learn to act more vividly and confidently in public. besides, you can practice your oral english so that you can improve your fluency of speaking.______, reading course is also preferred by many students because it can enable you to widen your horizons and expand your knowledge.
?first of all; and; also; in addition; what’s more / furthermore; as far as i’ m concerned/ in my opinion; in my view/ as to me / as for me / from my point of view / personally speaking(注:第四个空不建议用besides,因为下文出现了)
中考高手如云,如果想在写作板块取得高分,只靠句子写对,加入衔接词,还远远不够。可能大家已经迫不及待,中考写作的终极秘籍是什么呢?其实,我们需要做的,是升级短语和美化句子。那么在这个板块,就来告诉同学们,我们可以用什么短语和句子,让作文更加高大上。
首先是短语部分,鉴于篇幅有限,给同学们举一些例子。
(1) a good teacher and great friend
→ an excellent teacher and wonderful friend
(2) play football and play chess
升级版1:play football as well as play chess
升级版2:not only play football but also play chess
升级版3:play football and play chess as well
那么应用以上的例子,我们来看看,我们如何升级刚刚写的句子。
(1) as far as i’ m concerned, reading course is also preferred by many students because it can enable you to widen your horizons and expand your knowledge.
参考版本:
as far as i’ m concerned, reading course is also preferred by many students because it can enable you to not only widen your horizons but also expand your knowledge.
(2) in addition, model-making course can be one of your chances to get closer to the science and help you become more interested in it.
参考版本:
in addition, model-making course can be one of your chances to get closer to the science as well as help you become more interested in it.
综合初中三年学到的内容以及我们寒假班的语法板块,我们提供以下句型给同学们作为参考。
(1) 定从,状从,宾从,被动;
(2) 比较级句型: the + 比较级,the +比较级。
(3) 倒装:only when we / if we / by doing……, can we…….
(4) btown句型(“我们的变态”句型)
b: because/ but/ by doing……
t: there be / there’ s no doubt that (毫无疑问)/ that’s why i …….
on the one hand , ……, on the other hand,……
w: what’s more,/ when/ what impresses me most is that……
n: no one can deny that ……(无可否认)
nothing is more important than …….
(5) ……is a good way/ choice to do…….
(6) it‘s + adj. for sb. to do…….
(7) as the saying goes,…….
那么接下来,我们来看看,我们可以如何让句子变得优美。
(1) 原句:playing football can build up our body and doing more exercises will keep you healthy.
参考版本:
there is no doubt that playing football can build up our body. the more exercises you do, the healthier you will be.
(2) also, encouraging cooperation can develop the teamwork spirits.
参考版本:
also, encouraging cooperation is a good way to develop the teamwork spirits
(3) in this course, you will be able to learn to act more vividly and confidently in public.
参考版本:
in this course, you will be able to learn how to act more vividly and confidently in public.
接着,我们还可以给文章加入一个结尾段。考官最喜欢看到具有特色的语句啦!我们可以运用倒装句子或者谚语或者呼吁型的句子,给文章加一个呼应全文的结尾。
这篇作文,你有什么想法呢?
参考版本:
as the saying goes, all work no play makes jack a dull boy. i hope we students will have a more colorful school life.
最后,我们把刚刚的内容全部组合在一起,就变成以下的文章:
students in our school are free to choose some special courses according to their interest.
first of all, our school provides students with football training class. there is no doubt that playing football can build up our body. the more exercises you do, the healthier you will be. also, encouraging cooperation is a good way to develop the teamwork spirits. in addition, model-making course can be one of your chances to get closer to the science as well as help you become more interested in it. what’s more, there is an english drama training course for you. in this course, in this course, you will be able to learn how to act more vividly and confidently in public.besides, you would like to practice your oral english so that you can improve your fluency of speaking.
as far as i’m concerned, reading course is also preferred by many studentsbecause it can enable you to not only widen your horizons but also expand your knowledge.
as the saying goes, all work no play makes jack a dull boy. i hope we students will have a more colorful school life.
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